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The Narrative

Daniel went to Hawaii with his family for his parents anniversary. The family members that went on this exciting trip were his two brother, his cousin, his aunt, and his self. So they travel by airplane on the La x port, now that’s exciting. also which was a five hour flight, now that a long time and it must be really far. When they arrive at there destination, the first thing they did was, they check in Harris Hotel which is a really big and amazing hotel. Then they went out to eat for the first two hours. Daniel order a really juicy and crunchy lobster. His older brother order some really good sizzling steak. While they were eating and having a good time, his parents danced happily together. Next Daniel went to a bar where there were a lot of people.He then order a really good Mojito. He was feeling very joyful and had a great time in there.  Later that night he and his family went back to the hotel ending there first day happily. The fouling day Daniel and his family went on a tour on the island. He saw enourmous volcanos and not only that but he saw them while they were erupting. Now that’s a story to tell and to remember. Then finally he turned up for the night. He and his family stayed there for six night. So what he will always remember will be the volcanos, the culture, and the way the women looked.

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Conversation Starter

As I was working on this piece of writing, the things that were going threw my head were how can I start a conversation with this for characters that I was given. also how can I make them have an interesting conversation. I got stuck on my writing when I kept running out of ideas on, how to keep the conversation going. When I was stuck on my writing, the things that helped me continue were the characters. it was the characters because they were a chicken a pig a cow and a farmer. so I mad them want to eat each other. The things that didn’t helped me were that I had to make them talk to each other like as if they were real. I felt very happy as I was writing this piece of writing because in the end I came up with really good ideas, that I thought I never had in me. The writing was meaningful to me because I felt like quitting in the begging but I just kept grinning threw it. My writing those show my thinking on the topic because it was all about animals and food. I feel the strongest on this piece of writing being clearly organized. I do feel very strong that I was able to develop and explain my ideas in this piece of writing. I do feel that the grammar and spelling are very clear enough for the reader to understand the meaning.

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Spuckey Story Starter

What I was thinking about as I was working on this piece of writing was about something that happened to me when I was little. so I decided to write about that time when I almost had a heart attack. To be honest I really didn’t get stuck that much. well I only got stuck on the remembering part. I would forget something’s that happened but I would easily remember them. When I got stuck the things that helped me continue was my memory. Also the events that happened because those I will never forget the good scare that my brother and sister gave me that time. As I worked on this piece of writing I felt very happy. The reason I felt very happy was because those are memories that we are going to talk about when we get older and older.Next time I will try to add on more to the story because I had a lot more to tell. The writing was meaningful to me because it was a good memory that my brother, sister, and I created. even thought it was a scary one I was glade it happened. Yes the writing shows my thinking on the topic because it was the first time I tripped out. I feel very strongly about the piece being well organized because I took my time on it and I put my effort into it.I felt that I was able to fully developed and explain my ideas. I also feel that the grammar and spelling are clear enough for the reader to understand the meaning of what I’m saying.

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Where I’m from

As I worked on this piece of writing, I was thinking about my family and the things that I did as I was little. The place were I got stuck on my writing was when we had to fill in the blanks.What helped me continue when I was stuck was my instructor Mr. wheeler. He gave me some examples on how to write it. also as I was writing what helped me was my brain. I remember things like if I lived them yesterday. But the things that didn’t help me as I was writing was that I was thinking to much about the writing. The way I felt as I was writing was angry. I was angry at fist because I didn’t understand what I was doing. The writing was not that meaningful because I really was frustrated through the whole writing.The writing did show a lot of my thinking of the writing because it had to be very descriptive. I feel that the piece is clearly organized because all we had to do was to fill in the blanks. I felt that I was not able to develop and explain my ideas because I was just to mad through out the whole thing.I feel that the grammar and spelling are not clearly enough that that reader will not be able to understand because I skim through the whole thing.

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Grilled Chicken is My Favorite food of all Time

I really don’t know how many steps I did to write this finished piece. But ill tell you what I did do and didn’t do. I did brainstorm a lot on this one. I even had to go and do some research on the words that I was looking up on. I did use some inspiration on this one to. I use a little of inspiration to make the written more special and to give it a better taste. I did not just start writing because I knew about what I was talking about. I did need some help on understanding what I was suppose to put on my writing. Also I was glad I got help because it just mad the writing more simple and easy when you know what your suppose to be putting. They helped me by understanding what I was suppose to be writing down and the specific words that I hade to come up with. They also gave me a good example of how I was suppose to be doing it.I did read it to myself at the end to see how it would sound. it sounded ok but I decided to make a couple of changes.While I was working on this piece of writing I was thinking about food. not any kind of food but about that juicy and sizzling grilled chicken. To be honest I got really hungry and even right now I’m getting hungry just talking about this. The place that I got stuck on was when I had to find specific words that described that chickens  taste, hear, smelled, feel , and even see. So what helped me move on was the technology and my teacher. the technology helped me with research on the words. my teacher showed me good examples on the writing. The way I felt on this piece of writing was really hungry. The writing is meaningful to me because that’s when I started to get serious about eating healthy when I started to eat and learned to cook grilled chicken. yes the writing those show my thinking on my writing. To be honest I don’t feel that the writing is fully organized. I felt that I was able to explain and developed my ideas in this writing.Yes I do feel that the reader will be able to understand my writing.

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While I was doing the once upon a time, I did brain storm a little because some of the stories that other people had put were really good. I really did not use inspiration because I usually wrote about scary stuff to make the story interesting. In the beginning I did start just writing whatever because I was not into some of the story’s. But later on the stories started to get really interesting and some of them were really funny to read. A friend of my did start to help me when I started to run out of ideas to put in the story. That’s when I got interested because some people really have good ideas and I like to see different view points. At first I did not read it out loud because it sounded good in my head. later on I did read it out loud and it did not sound the same. so it sounded pretty bad and had to make changes. some of the changes were to make the sentences more interesting by adding more actions and more detailed words. The things that I got stuck while I was working on the writing was that I kept running out of ideas. I would have a really good idea but then I would just stop and go nowhere. I had ideas but they were not interested enough and would not lead to the next thing. what helped me move to the next step was the brain storming. I would write down two ideas and just go from there. then from there I would just keep doing the same thing and it turned out pretty good. At first when I started to write, I felt a little frustrated because some of the stories that I had. they were just bad like they didn’t make any sense. Later on I just went along with It and I ended up fixing it. Next time I will get more engaged with the stories and put a lot more effort into them. The wring was meaningful to me because it was about my past ex girlfriend that I really loved a lot. like my heart will only beat for her. The writing those show the way I was thinking in the beginning. I feel that the piece is kind of organized, like its written well. like it has its beginning middle and end. I felt that I was not able to explain my ideas and fully developed them because we kept switching from story to story. I say that if I would continue working on this piece, I would have more time to develop and fully expand my way of thinking.

Grilled Chicken

My favorite food to eat of all time is grilled chicken. It feels so smooth like a fat cat cuddling up on you. When you first buy the chicken fresh, it feels so soft like a puppy’s hair. Also when you over cook the grilled chicken, it can come out a little crunchy like roasted peanuts. When the grilled chicken is wet, it feels very loose like a wet shower soap. But when the grilled chicken is not wet it feels very buttery like oil on your hands. Not only that but I love the way it smells. The grilled chicken smells so good like when you open a brand new book. When the grilled chicken is done it smells so delightful like when a hot girl walk by and she just has that perfume on point. When added to much spice to the chicken, it can smell really spicy like hot peppers. But when cooked right, the smell is so pleasant like red roses. You can tell this is right if you can see the steps. The chicken should be nice and round like a little kids ball. Also the inside should be white like the white house. The outside should be nice and brown like a Latino. If your trying to eat healthy then your chicken should be cut lean like an aesthetic body boulder. If you know your doing things right then the taste should tell it to you. it should taste delicious like jelly ranchers. Also when you taste it, this should be very juicy like a watermelon. Also sometimes it comes out salty if added to much salt. But it taste better when its crispy like sunflower seeds. Lastly you should take time in hearing. When its in the pan it should be sizzling like a bunch of bees. Also when your family is eating you can hear gurgling of how good it is. Not only that but you can hear the crunching of the chicken. in the end when its all made it should be buzzing like a bunch of mosquitos.

Reflection Journal

Reflection Journal

My book is about events that me and my family did when we were little. It was only my little brother, my little sister, my mom, and lastly me. It’s also the way we use to show love to each other. Also it was when we were really happy. The book that’s named family is created with hard white paper. Also with a really good covers, so if it gets wet the paper will get safe. I really don’t know what I like about my book because I didn’t put a lot of my time in it because I was really busy and have so many family problems at home that I can’t talk about right now. It’s really hard to focus, when you have so much drama at home. OH wait, there is one thing that I like about my book. The thing that I most like about my book is that I created it myself, like I didn’t ask for help it was all me. It feels pretty good to do something that you thought was going to be hard and go through with it in the end. At first I was making things complicated because I was over thinking it. Later I decided to just write the book about something that I remember in my heart that I really liked doing when I was little. So that what I wrote the book based on what I or my family did when we were small or you can say little kids. There are many things that I would have liked to change before the time ended up for our book. The first thing I would have love to change was the pictures. I hand wrote then myself at the last minute and I can tell you I do not like the way they came out. I would change them to actual pictures like google pictures from the internet and put them instead of my, had written pictures. Like for the characters in my book would have been cartoon characters. Like maybe Hercules for my character. Wonder women for the character of my mom. Mikey Angelo for the character of my brother. And lastly Electra for the character for my sister.

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7-22-2015

Making Things Right

So my friend Aimee called me yesterday to tell me bad news about what happened in her job. She was really upset because she had work so hard on her presentation. The problem that happened at her work was that the person that she was competing against tolled her that they were not competing. so he asked if he could see her presentation, so knowing Aimee she is so nice that she did. Then the next day when it was presentation time, he the men that saw Aimee’s presentation copy and took her ideas. When she tolled me this I was really frustrated and made. I just couldn’t believe that this could happened to her especially to someone who is a really good person. So I wanted to do something about this because that is just not fair. so what I did was I went to her job and I asked to see the manager or someone in high power. so I meet the boss named jimmy, he is Chinese and very polite men. so I tolled him what happened and to give Aimee a second chance. so we talked me and Jimmy. Then he called in Aimee and tolled her right in front of me that she will get a second chance. so he tolled her and the other guy that took her ideas, that there is going to be a new presentation due next Monday. they will present it and who ever gives the best presentation will get the promotion. So she was really happy because of her smile in her face that she had when jimmy said that. I know why she had that smile because we both knew she was going to win. so I tolled the men thank you for your time and for giving Aimee a second chance. then Jimmy quickly reply back no thank you for making things right and we shock hands and I left. As I was leaving Aimee came after me and said thank you so much and so she invited me to go eat for dinner.

Journal 11

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7-21-2015

connection

The girl that I meet at the bus station, we seem to connect a lot. we seem to have the same goals as a healthy life style. Also we have the same religion, the is Christians. So we have been hanging out a lot now and 3 days ago on Sunday we hanged out at the mall. we ate lunch together. she order some rice, broccoli, shrimp, and some ice tea. then I order some grilled chicken with a little bit of rice, and some veggies. also I wanted oat meal but there was none in the chines food, so I went over to McDonalds and got some oat meal and some green tea. so we sat and talked for hours. Next we walked around the mall, I was showing her what there was around and what kind of stores there was. so it was getting late and she had to go home because she needs to prepare for her presentation for her company that she is working at. so we started walking  to the gym were I work out because her friend is going to pick her up there. so while we started to walk she saw this little train for little kids. she said that she wanted to go. I was surprise because I we actually went on it. so we went and it was really cool and I was just laughing to much because everyone in the mall were like what are you doing and also they were smiling because we were just having fun. so she took pictures on her phone and we just had fun on that little train. So we started walking to the gym and when we got to the front door it was raining like crazy. Luckily Aimee brought her umbrella and I thought it was big but it was really small. so she said that we can share. so we went under together and we hold each other tight so we can fit under the little umbrella. So we made it safe but a little wet from the shoulders and elbows. so we went inside the gym and sat on the chairs and just talked while we waited for her friend. while we waited, Aimee showed me her presentation on her little computer that she brought with her. It was really cool the things she created on the computer and what amazed me the most was how her English has been improving. like her presentation was all in tawnies but she explained everything on her presentation in English perfect. there were little words that she couldn’t say but overall it was amazing. So her friend shoot her a text that she was here, so I walked her out. while I walked her out and tolled her bye she came back and unexpectedly gave me a kiss in my right cheek. I was very surprise but happy at the same time.